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Fay and the Boys are back and this time they're getting dragged to a wedding...an Italian wedding that is. Will the Boys be able to get through the ten course meal and deal with Fay's relatives and come out in one piece? Let's find out shall we? Salute!
[Lost Boys] David, Dwayne, Marko, OC: Female, Paul
Genres: Comedy/Parody, Humour, Supernatural
Pairing(s): None
Warnings: None
Series: None
PG-13 • Completed: No • 2 chapter(s) • Published: 19 May 2007 • Updated: 05 Feb 2009 • Word Count: 8017 • Read Count: 2848 • Reviews: 6 • [Report This]

Reviewer: Llayth Signed
Date: 06 Feb 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ahahahaha! David... in a suit! Hahahahaa! Oh, honey, thank you so much for torturing him so.

So... I love this! I love the Italian in this story. There is such a strong sense of culture here which says so much about the character.

I'm wondering... is there any story I need to read first before this one or is it a completely stand alone story? xxx

At last, it's Paul's turn to post his Personal Ad, with a little help from Dwayne.
[Paul] Dwayne, Paul
Genres: None
Pairing(s): None
Warnings: Adult Themes, Blood play, Drug Use, Mild Violence, Other potentially disturbing content
Series: Sweet Justice, Personal Ads Series
PG-13 • Completed: Yes • 1 chapter(s) • Published: 13 Oct 2007 • Updated: 13 Oct 2007 • Word Count: 364 • Read Count: 1959 • Reviews: 5 • [Report This]

Reviewer: Llayth Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 18 Dec 2007 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Lmfao, trust Paul to be the one who can't spell! Love it!

On the road to a great horse- racing career, Serenity Wood has discovered she’s no ordinary girl. She can do things even science has yet to explain. The question she asks herself is why? A brief stop in Santa Carla leads her to a letter that promises to answer all her questions, but it also leads her into a delicately set trap.
[Lost Boys] Alan Frog, David, Dwayne, Edgar Frog, Marko, Max, OC: Female, OCs: Multiple, Paul
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst, Character Reflection, Comedy/Parody, Drama, Fluff, General, Romance, Supernatural, Suspense
Pairing(s): None
Warnings: Blood play, Character Death, Smut (graphic sex scenes)
Series: None
NC-17 • Completed: No • 20 chapter(s) • Published: 02 Jan 2008 • Updated: 19 Jan 2009 • Word Count: 87635 • Read Count: 58521 • Reviews: 53 • [Report This]

Reviewer: Llayth Signed
Date: 21 Jan 2008 Title: Chapter 4: White Rabbit

A Marko story! With a Claire-like character *hugs Jenn* Me loves, me loves, me loves! Its great to see the mixture of supernatural and humour from the Frog brothers in the story. I also like the way none of the boys fell head over heels in love with Serinity like I've seen in the Lost Boys section on Fanfiction. And Marko's character is lovely. Playful with that hint of sexiness. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: Llayth Signed
Date: 29 Jan 2008 Title: Chapter 5: Coming Undone

Ooo bad Max! *clubs him with a baseball bat* Poor Serenity. Gets injected, faints, and wakes up with a reaction to being bitten.

Reviewer: Llayth Signed
Date: 27 Feb 2008 Title: Chapter 7: Red Rain

*Sighs dreamily* Alan was brilliant! He's so hot and funny when he's angry! And I feel so sorry for Serenity. She's really been sucked into chaos. xxxx

Author's Response: Yes, I really do like Alan. I never used to. Thanks for the review! :-)

Reviewer: Llayth Signed
Date: 16 Apr 2008 Title: Chapter 9: House On Haunted Hill

Hehehe, you definately know how to make the Frogs funny! "I'm not you're bro, bro!" - I loved that! And nice Serenity/Marko. The world needs more Marko/OC. And great writing! I can picture it as I read.

Author's Response: Thanks! It\'s always been easy to write the Frogs. I feel like they are my little brothers or something. Things are heating up with Serenity/Marko.

Reviewer: Llayth Signed
Date: 24 Apr 2008 Title: Chapter 10: Uninvited

Ooo a mysterious boy! That Carla was freaky! /shudders/ And Marko/Serenity... so sweet.

Reviewer: Llayth Signed
Date: 24 Apr 2008 Title: Chapter 11: Spells & Hybrids

Goddess, Max is the epitome of evil! And he reminds me so much of Jack Coleman but creepy and just... evil! Goddess, so evil! This has been an excellent story so far. The way you've brought the Frogs and vampires together is so realistic. They're working together yet still hostile towards each other.

Author's Response: Thank you! I actually might turn it into a series. And Max, yes, I had no idea he could be that sinister. It\'s freaky.

Reviewer: Llayth Signed
Date: 15 May 2008 Title: Chapter 12: I Am The Sun and Heir

Lmfao! Trust Paul to come out with 'are you gay?' I love that name for Sage and Serenity... unicorns... its magickal

Reviewer: Llayth Signed
Date: 23 Jul 2008 Title: Chapter 15: Black Out

Paul... dead? *lip trembles* Goddess, you have to write another chapter soon. I specifically loved the description at the beginning of The Black. That was a beautiful peice of writing you created there.

Author's Response: Noooo! Would never kill off the boys...permanently anyway. He was brave and volunteered for that little scene. I\'m glad you liked it. Thank you for the review!

Reviewer: Llayth Signed
Date: 23 Sep 2008 Title: Chapter 16: Captive

I love CrackerJack! He is my favourite character now! His personality is different and funny so big huge 'WELL DONE' on creating that character. What I loved most of all about this chapter was Paul and David feeding. This part:

The girl let out a squeak, and her voice quivered as she finally spoke. “You promise…you let me go.”

“I said I would, I never said anything about my friend.” He smirked and let her head drop as Paul tore into her.

That was a FANTASTIC portrayal of David. So Davidy.

Author's Response: Yeah, I love him too. He just couldn\'t wait to get into the story, haha. I got a little twinge of inspirationg when I saw the movie \'Jumper\' I loved the character \'Griffon\' thought he was better than the main character, and what do you know, here comes \'CrackerJack\' Although they are very different characters from each other.\r\n\r\nDavid finally decided to talk, and when he does, he doesn\'t shut up for awhile, so you really get in touch with his uh...true side? LOL Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Llayth Signed
Date: 12 Nov 2008 Title: Chapter 17: Breaking and Entering

Lol! Poor Alan! Jax is insane haha!

Author's Response: Nah, he just likes to have a crazy fun time, LOL. Thanks for reading it by the way, is much appreciated.

Reviewer: Llayth Signed
Date: 21 Dec 2008 Title: Chapter 18: No Where To Run

Ooo, Marko having another oh-so-sexy moment. I loved that! I really like all these different supernatural beings together. Vampires... werewolves... banshees. It expands on the world we saw in the film.
I think this sentence may need shortening. No re-phrasing because it's really good. Nice description. Just needs breaking up:
Serenity forgot her little power trance and moral discomfort and looked to Marko again, this time for a little guidance as she meekly held the shoulder that Jax had grazed almost as if she were afraid more power would come leaking out of her and become spoiled like some toxic waste.

The wording is beautiful; it just a bit too long. I hope that helps! xxx

Author's Response: I didn\'t get a little notice telling me that you had reviewed, darn it all! But thank you soo much! I think I\'ve rewritten that sentence about ten times, haha, and it\'s still too long. But thank you for pointing it out, definately!

Reviewer: Llayth Signed
Date: 29 Dec 2008 Title: Chapter 19: Fatal Reminiscence

Oh, yes! Jax is the man! The description of him turning wolf and attacking - very effective. I could see it happening in my head as I read it. xxx

Reviewer: Llayth Signed
Date: 20 Jan 2009 Title: Chapter 20: 24 Hours

*Claws out* Max! *hisses* Kill him!

Goddess... plently of antagonism. Vampire slayers who hate the wolves and vamps, the wolves and vamps hate each other. And it is quite realistic. The dislike they all have for each other makes it really entertaining.

Author's Response: Haha, I know, it\'s like a whole circle of hate, and yet they all have to work together. And don\'t worry, we\'ll get that Max, for sure!