Date: 06 Mar 2009 11:23 pm Title: first night
I'm actually guilty as charged when it comes to writing this stuff. It's fun to do sometimes, and it can be a good read. But honestly, when there is a constant down pour of fan fic that starts out with some girl getting it on with one or more of the boys, it gets old. I'm not saying that this isn't good, it is, I just like a little more plot before the sex. Especially when there are a thousand girls out there the boys just could pic from and each have his own.
You might want to put some more spacing in-between paragraphs as well, it just makes it easier to read. And I'm curious to know where this will go in the next chapter.
Author's Response: apparently spacing is big around these parts? In the few days I've had these posted all reviews I've gotten have mentioned that. And I have never gotten that from anyone else! haha. It bothers me when there's spacing like that, but if it seems to be the norm around here, then I am willing to change. I just need to work up the patience and find time to go through and change it all. rnrnand I'm glad you enjoy it at least a little bit. It was going to be just a little oneshot I felt like writing for the hell of it. But I wanted to start a second story and I figured why not use that? But I'm not so sure about it anymore. I've gotten an idea, but it doesn't seem to fit into this as much as I'd like... so it might just stay as porn without a plot. she might just stay as a good lay before a good meal. ;) rnrnthank you for your opinion! I really do appreciate knowing what others think.rn-Kristina.