Date: 18 Mar 2014 7:05 am Title: Chapter 1
Am I the only one to notice that, save for Sam being mentioned ONCE by name, he wasn't in this fic? He was mentioned twice, the first time his name wasn't mentioned. Why is that?
Date: 02 Feb 2007 8:18 pm Title: Chapter 1
Well, at first I was afraid to read this, I thought I'd be lost because I'm not a fan of White Wolf or any of the other things you listed.
Thankfully you made it all understandable! It... hmm, what's the word? Flowed? Meshed?
Eh, you get what I mean lol
I really enjoyed this, I like the thought of David having a different sire other than Max.
Good job :o)
One thing I gotta point out for ya is that several times you forgot to capitalize at the beginning of sentences, and also forgot to put periods at the end of the sentence. No biggy, we all miss that stuff. Lol you wouldn't believe how times I have to keep going back over my own published story and fix that type of stuff.
Once again, good job!
p.s. Are you gonna add more to this? I hope you do. *hint hint*
Author's Response: *grin* much happyness! I'm glad I mad all he White Wolf stuff I put in understandable! I was a bit worried about that. Hmm, I thought I'd fixed the capitalization/punctuation issues, thanks for pointing that out. :) I'll have to go fix that. And yah, I may work more on this, I've been considering a prequel or seqel for a bit. At the verry least I may post my alternate verson. Mostly alternate ending, really... :/