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Reviewer: OliviaRose Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Aug 2012 6:50 pm Title: A

Ruby swallowed. Four strange guys were offering a ride, to hear some stupid legend. Ah hell, you only live once, girl. Right?

YOLO.

Reviewer: Donna87 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Feb 2007 9:42 am Title: A

Great story Tab! I think it's a very original idea and nothing like I've read when it comes to TLB fanfic.

I do wish, though, that you would have gone into more detail with the whole of the story. I can't pinpoint one spot exactly but I'm a sucker for detail and I was dying for something more, for instance in Paul's incessant need to get laid. Why was that such a thing for him? And what's with the allowances? How was that factioned out and when did that come about? Things like that. Baby criticisms!

I will admit though, I'm not all that thrilled with your portrayal of Marko. I find him the hardest boy to write because he's so multifaceted and so deep yet his outward persona is so deceiving. While it was fitting for the story, personally I wouldn't have made him that mushy. But it was cute nonetheless.

I liked how you gave all of the characters (the boys, I mean) very distince personalities and even though I don't agree with Marko's, I believe it was needed in order to balance out the other boys.

And I like the way you write David as well. You don't give him loads of dialogue but his actions, his glowering and glaring, speak more than his words could.

Now I just have to go find the other sections of your story! I'll cut and paste this into your reveiews over in the archives! (see? I told you I'd do it!)

D aka Marko

Reviewer: Marko_Obsessor Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 May 2006 11:36 pm Title: A

I really like this story! (IT HAS MARKO IN IT!!!!!!!!!!) Ruby is such an awsome character though! could u help me think of a plot for my story? (this is my first ID on this site)

Reviewer: M Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf star [Report This]
Date: 04 May 2006 8:47 pm Title: M

Excellent story! Does she die in the end? I hope not.

Reviewer: Carmen Lovato Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Jan 2006 4:31 am Title: A

I this is a story like no other. At times you almost wish it would happens to you. And it tells a story like it happened to you. Also it has so kind of things that makes you want to read it over and over again.

Reviewer: Belewian Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07 Sep 2005 7:10 pm Title: A

This story is so amazing. I love it so much and I'm glad there's a sequel!

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

Reviewer: Kellcool Signed starstarstarstarhalf star [Report This]
Date: 07 Jan 2005 4:09 pm Title: M

by the way, i do NOT think it will ruin the end to the original story if you wrote a sequel. plz do more, i love this story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: Kellcool Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Jan 2005 7:51 pm Title: M

I absolutly loved this story. It has been one of my favourites for a while. Keep up the good writing on other pieces. I really would like to her an after story about wot happened to Ruby and if she was turned or not, but you might think it would ruin the ending to the original story.

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

Reviewer: CSwift Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Jan 2005 6:51 pm Title: A

A very well written and enjoyable story. The end kind of took me by surprise and left it wide open for a sequel. I do hope you plan on writing one. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

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